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Any critique for my story?

2016-07-22 15:26:59 in Writing Tips / Advice by Hunor Barabas

Hey! I would like to have your opinion on the Pokemon story that I've written. It would mean a lot to know where I stand in terms of my English writing skills. Thanks to anyone in advance who gives me their opinion!


Moderator

Moderator 2016-07-22T17:29:55+0000

Yes, absolutely. By the way, about your avatar: I was wondering if you could explain what it means?

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M. Ashraful Tanvir

M. Ashraful Tanvir 2016-07-22T17:37:12+0000

Now that you mention it I too want to know.

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Hunor Barabas

Hunor Barabas 2016-07-22T19:17:32+0000

It is a reference to League of Legends, a game that I play. It was originally the logo of my website where people could share memes, cosplays and videos related to the game, but I closed it due to lack of time that I could dedicate to it

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Hunor Barabas

Hunor Barabas 2016-07-22T19:17:33+0000

It is a reference to League of Legends, a game that I play. It was originally the logo of my website where people could share memes, cosplays and videos related to the game, but I closed it due to lack of time that I could dedicate to it

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M. Ashraful Tanvir

M. Ashraful Tanvir 2016-07-22T19:21:38+0000

Which server? question

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Hunor Barabas

Hunor Barabas 2016-07-22T19:35:52+0000

EUNE question

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M. Ashraful Tanvir

M. Ashraful Tanvir 2016-07-22T19:39:46+0000

SEA

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M. Ashraful Tanvir

M. Ashraful Tanvir 2016-07-22T16:05:34+0000

It was good! unlike mine your words are organized and professional. Loved the last line "a creature which is trained and used for battle who obeys his master without a doubt...a Pokémon!" Hats off to you!

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Hunor Barabas

Hunor Barabas 2016-07-22T16:56:12+0000

Thank you very much! Yours was good too, don't be so down!

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Moderator

Moderator 2016-07-22T17:32:08+0000

M. Ashraful, you just need to work on your flow and it would be just as professional; try to avoiding run-ons and long sentences.

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